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Chapter 8 – Shattered Glass

SUNSIDE


"You know," said Twilight to Applejack as they trod along the path, leaving Ponyville behind them, "this would be so much easier if you let me lead."

Applejack snorted.  "And give you the chance to escape?" she said, laughing.  "Not a chance.  I know the way.  I think.  I can lead fine," she added before stumbling over the cast on her leg, making the other ponies slow their pace again.

From the back of the line, Rainbow Dash rolled her eyes.  "This isn't going to be like the time you tried to take us to Zecora's, is it?"

"We got out of that okay, didn't we?" asked Spike, who was riding on Rainbow Dash's back.  As he spoke, he lost his grip on Rainbow's coat and nearly toppled, and he had to grab onto her mane to avoid from falling off altogether.

Rainbow winced from the pain, but said nothing as Spike climbed up her mane and back into position.  "Eventually," she said.  "After a certain dragon panicked and started sending random sticks over to Celestia.  We're lucky she was smart enough to figure it out."  Her voice then dropped an octave, and each words emerged from her lips separately and covered in malice.  "She summoned the Royal Guard to find us.  I've never been more humiliated in my life."

"Sure you have," interrupted Fluttershy, who was walking alongside Twilight in the middle.  "What about Rarity's botched fashion show?  Or that incident back at Flight School in the principal's office?"

"Which one?" asked Rainbow, who had visited the principal more times than she could count on her two front hooves.  Which was to say, she had been more than twice.

"The only one where the principal hadn't called you there.  Remember, you made me promise never to tell anypony about it?"

"No..." said Rainbow, still trying to narrow down the possibilities.

"I think it involved a certain griffin and a can of WD-40, among some other things," recalled Fluttershy.

"Right..." moaned Rainbow Dash.  "She didn't even go to the same school, you know that?  Some snooty private school."

Rarity, trotting next to Rainbow Dash, broke her silence.  "This nostalgia is nice and all, but it doesn't exactly explain what is going on here."

Spike shrugged.  "You've got me," he said.  "I'm as lost as you are."

Pinkie Pie, who had managed to refrain from speaking by hopping in circles around the other six, found an opportunity to join the conversation and seized it.  "Twilight's been acting all funny because she's not Twilight," she said.

"Yes, yes," muttered Rarity.  "You explained that already.  But where are we going?"

"Sky Mirror Lake," answered Twilight.  "I can explain things better once we get there.  Trust me."

"Not likely," huffed Applejack.  "I'd trust ya about as far as I can buck ya.  I wouldn't put it past ya to run away."

"I can teleport, Oran-"  Twilight paused.  "I mean, Applejack," she finished.  "If I didn't want to cooperate, I'd already be halfway to Stalliongrad."

"Jus' don't talk," ordered Applejack.  "The next time you open that muzzle of yours, it better be explaining what the hay's goin' on around here."



To Twilight's relief, Sky Mirror Lake existed sunside.

Sunside was the word she had used in her notes to describe this world, and it made sense.  The side with the sun, even if it wasn't sunny all the time.  Now, as the group neared the water's edge, six pairs of eyes turned to her, expectantly.

"Okay," she began, her voice shaking.  "I want you all to imagine that the world is like this lake."

Applejack's eyes narrowed.  "Excuse me," she said insincerely, "but what does this have to do with you tellin' us where the real Twilight is, or what you're doin' here lookin' like her."  She felt a shove against her shoulder, and she turned to see Rainbow Dash giving a glare.

"Let her finish," said Rainbow Dash.  "She'll get to it."

Twilight shrunk back a little, frightened by the animosity.  Fluttershy gave a small nod of encouragement, and Twilight continued.

"I told you, I am Twilight, just,"  She paused, not sure how to say it.  She eventually decided to just explain it the way it was.  "I'm her from another world."

"Horseapples."

"Now, as I was saying, imagine this lake is the world.  Look into the water, and tell me what you see."

The others obeyed and began scanning the water for whatever Twilight was talking about.  Fluttershy, noticing a school of fish, became distracted, giggling as they darted about.  Applejack begrudgingly complied but didn't say anything.  Pinkie Pie, rather than watch anything actually in the water, began making faces, using the lake as a mirror.  Rainbow Dash looked over at Pinkie Pie's reflection and began laughing, filled with a sort of giddiness that could only happen around Pinkie Pie, and had to happen around Pinkie Pie.

"What do you see?" asked Twilight.

Rainbow Dash turned her head forward and examined her own reflection.  "Just some kelp," she answered, "and rocks.  And one very awesome pony."

"Exactly," said Twilight.  Rainbow Dash raised her head, confused about what she had done to get the question right.  "Your reflections," clarified Twilight.  "If the lake is the world, then it has two halves.  The part above the surface, where you are, and the part below, where your reflection is."

"You're Twilight's reflection," guessed Spike.

"And she's mine.  In a manner of speaking."

Spike looked back at the water.  "I guess," he said.  "But wait.  The reflections are exactly the same as us.  Wouldn't that make your world just like ours?"

Twilight smiled.  "An excellent observation, Spike.  Which brings us to point number two: magic."  She lifted a rock off of the ground with telekinesis.  "Now imagine this rock is a spell.  Watch what happens when I 'cast' it."  She tossed the rock into the water, where it sunk to the bottom, creating a number of concentric waves at the point of impact.  Pinkie Pie watched her reflection as it was distorted by the waves passing over it.

Fluttershy leaped away from the water and hid in the grass, while Pinkie Pie continued making faces in the water.  "It's like a fun house mirror!" she exclaimed.

"Right," said Twilight.  "Magic has a measurable 'rippling' effect of sorts on the other side.  It's the use of magic that makes the two worlds different."

"Nah," said Applejack.  "Look.  The waves are already gone.  They don't last forever."

Twilight nodded, trying to stay calm.  "Right, Applejack, but remember this is just a model.  When it comes to magic, the ripples can last a lot longer before they settle out.  The point is, sometime in the past there was very powerful magic.  Powerful enough to cause a major divergence between worlds that still hasn't resolved itself.  That's why I don't know the things she knows.  I'm not her; my life is completely different.  That's why I wanted to come here."

"How?" asked Rainbow Dash, who now didn't know what to feel about the impostor.  "What's so bad about life over there, on the other side?"

Twilight looked at the ground.  Some part of her had been trying to convince her that the dark and barren world was only in her imagination, and it had taken all of her courage not to give up and believe it.  "I never met any of you guys, for starters," she said.  "You know the Summer Sun celebration, two years ago?  That was the last day the sun rose in Equestria."

"Black Snooty?" asked Pinkie Pie.

Twilight stared at the pink mare, not comprehending.  "Sure," she said at last.  "This creature,  Nightmare Moon, came to Equestria and covered it in eternal night.  I was supposed to stop her.  I failed.  All across Equestria ponies are starving, and it's all my fault.  But that's not important.  The important part here is the rock."

"What's so special about a rock?" asked Rarity.

"Not what it is," corrected Twilight.  "Where it is.  The rock is on the other side of the water now.  In the model, that means it's gone through the barrier between worlds.  So, the question we asked ourselves was, if magical potential can travel across worlds, then why can't energy, or matter?  What if it was possible to send a pony through to the other side?"

"We?" asked Rainbow Dash.

"Zecora and me.  She was my assistant."

"So that's what you did," said Applejack, trying to regain control of the situation.  "You couldn't stand to look at the world you created, so you ran away."

Rarity shot Applejack a glare.  "It wasn't her fault, Darling, it's was Nightmare Moon's."

"We couldn't run away.  We couldn't figure it out," said Twilight.  "Our first experiments were with light.  We were able to build mirrors that would subject the photons to a magical field, force them to cross over.  It was a way to see into your world, and it worked both ways.  That was how we met the other Zecora.  It must be a strange experience, meeting yourself.  I don't know if I'll ever get to know it, though."

"But you did," said Rainbow Dash, staring at the impostor that resembled her friend.  "You had to have met yourself.  You kidnapped her."

"Let me finish," said Twilight.  "After that, we started to become a bit more ambitious.  We could send small items across, even though it took a lot of energy.  We could even control where they landed, to a certain extent.  And then I guess we got cocky.  Full of ourselves, because we tried it on a pony."

"And?" asked Pinkie Pie.

Twilight closed her eyes, once again imagining the poor mare's singed flesh and flaming mane.  "It was a failure," she explained.  "A catastrophic failure.  I don't know what went wrong.  Maybe we didn't have enough power.  But she didn't go through all the way."

"What happened?" asked Fluttershy, and the look on Twilight's face, grimacing and about to cry again, told Fluttershy she had struck a tender chord.

"We needed two burial sites," answered Twilight, slowly, trying desperately not to relive the memories.  "One on each side."

"Oh," said Applejack quietly, her calm breaking.

"I'm so sorry, darling," counseled Rarity, not sure what else to do.

"We gave up after that," said Twilight.  "It wasn't worth losing somepony else.  We just wanted to ease the suffering, do what we could.  We started building a magical greenhouse that could grow food, even without the sun.  If we couldn't bring back the sun, we could at least try and solve the hunger problem.  I like to think we saved a lot of lives with that."  Twilight smiled, knowing that she had done some good, even if it was just reversing damage she had caused.

"Twilight," interrupted Applejack.  "This still doesn't explain how you came over here.  You said you never figured out how to transport a pony."

"We didn't," said Twilight.  "And Zecora moved on.  But I didn't stop thinking about this place.  It was an endless temptation.  A paradise, just out of reach.  If we could only find a way across.  But we couldn't, of course.  The power required increased drastically with mass.  We might be able to manage a filly, but I wouldn't stoop so low as to experiment on somepony that young.  We just needed some way to reduce the mass of the transfer.  And eventually we did.  It was a theory, something untested.  But it was a way to cross over purely using things we already knew how to do.  It didn't require any matter to be transferred at all.  After all, a body is just flesh.  It's nothing special.  It was the mind we needed to get across."

"You mean a brain-switching spell?" asked Pinkie Pie, who had decided to approach the story as a riddle.  She'd seen a spell like that in Twilight's library, but had failed to convince her friend to use it to prank Rainbow Dash.

"A memory exchange," corrected Twilight.  "Not even the whole brain.  Memories are information; they have no mass.  The only requirement was that the two parties had to be in close physical proximity to each other, even if they were on other sides.  I knew where she lived; I followed her enough with a mirror to figure that out.  So I wrote a letter, asking her to come to the castle of the Royal Pony Sisters in the Everfree Forest."

"I remember that," said Rainbow Dash.  "We didn't see anypony there, and then Twilight just collapsed.  She woke up all confused and embarrassed, so I took her home.  But now that I think about it, right before it happened, I saw something.  Like a shimmer in the air, only there was darkness behind it."  She looked back at the lake.  "It looked like ripples.  That was you, wasn't it?"

"Girls," interrupted Rarity.  "You're missing the important bit.  This means that Twilight, our Twilight, is lost somewhere in a world ruled by that, that Tyrant Nightmare Moon.  Hopefully, if she has an ounce of salt in that new brainpan of hers, she'll be hiding out somewhere safe.  We just need to get the other Twilight to switch them back."

"It won't be that easy," said Twilight quietly.

"And why the hay not?" asked Applejack.

"Like I said, we need to be in close proximity to each other.  I wouldn't know where to find her."

"You could build another mirror," suggested Pinkie Pie.

"Actually," said Twilight, biting her lip, "there's another reason it may not work.  You see, I didn't mean to come to this world unprepared.  I wanted to spend a week or two following her, figuring out how she behaved, how to blend in, but my hand got forced a little early.  I was attacked."

"Attacked?" echoed Pinkie Pie with a gasp.  Twilight nodded.  "By what?" asked Pinkie.

"I don't know," admitted Twilight.  "Whatever it was, it wasn't pony.  And it hurt me, pretty badly.  Left a giant gash in my face."  She traced down the side of her face with a hoof.

Rainbow Dash was about to interject and ask why they couldn't even see a scar, but the answer dawned on her.  "You mean you put our friend in a wounded body?"

Twilight nodded.  "The wound was bleeding pretty freely, but I managed to get away from it.  But it looked like a hunter, and I figured it was only a matter of time until it found me again.  If I wanted to cross over, I had to do it then.  It's been a week since then.  I don't even know if my old body is still alive.  If it received prompt medical attention it might be okay, but it wouldn't since she would have woken up in the middle of the Everfree Forest."

Rarity couldn't believe what she was hearing.  "You jackanape," she whispered.

Applejack looked at Rarity, shocked.  "Rarity!" she cried.  "That language ain't necessary."

"Don't you get it?" shouted Rarity.  "Twilight may be dead, and it's all because this pony here was so much of a coward that she threw our Twilight under a metaphorical dragon's nest to save her  own flank!"

"Hey, now, we'll get her back," said Fluttershy, but none of the other ponies heard her.

"Enough!" shouted Applejack.  "Now I don't know 'bout the rest of y'all, but I don't plan on leaving a friend of mine out to dry."  She approached Twilight, staring her down.  "There's a killer after Twi' right now because it thinks she's you.  But I ain't gonna let her die.  Yer going to find a way to get Twilight back," she said.  "I don't care how long it takes you.  And if you can't do that, then yer going to find a way to get us over there to save her ourselves."

"But without a sufficient power source..." Twilight began to mumble.

"No buts.  You will save her, y'hear?"

"Don't worry," said Fluttershy.  "You'll find a way.  You do live in a library now, so you have plenty of research material.  I believe in you."

Twilight sighed, resigning herself to the impossible task before her.

"Actually," said Pinkie Pie, "I may be able to help too."

Everypony stared at her.  "And how do you plan on doing that?" asked Rainbow Dash.

"Well, not me helping, exactly," said Pinkie.  "But I know a stallion who might be able to help Twilight."

"Who?" asked Twilight anxiously.

"Exactly!" shouted Pinkie Pie.  Then her voice quieted.  "Wait, no.  Not 'who', but close.  You know, he's that brown stallion with the hour glass cutie mark.  I call him Doctor Whooves."
Hopefully this answers some questions.

I consider this to be the end of part one, or maybe after the next chapter, because you still need to really get to know moonside Pinkie Pie. We've learned the fates of all of the other Mane Cast but Rainbow Dash. (But this is a world without rainbows, after all.) The story is finally set up, for the most part. We finally have a new antagonist, and there is bound to be action in the near future.

Also, Doctor Whooves.

I never thought I would ever spend 20,000 words writing a story about ponies only to declare it "the end of part one."

Thank you, everypony. I honestly believe that without the encouragement I've received, I wouldn't have had the will to make it this far. But I'm not going to give up now. I'm riding this through until the end, even if it takes me a hundred chapters.

I hope it doesn't.

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SilverRattler Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I wish I could take Spike's place and ride on Dahsie's back. xD

And this part made me chuckle: "Which one?" asked Rainbow, who had visited the principal more times than she could count on her two front hooves. Which was to say, she had been more than twice.
hahaha
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012
I like reading these comments, because after 10 months, I've forgotten a lot of the earlier chapters. I need to go back and reread.
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SilverRattler Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ten months??
Am I seriously THAT far behind? xD
I am trying to find time to read these things. So far I'm up to part 12, but I'm not able to spend a lot of time reading. lol

It's quite an interesting read. :)
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012
No. I've the one that's fallen behind. My update speed has become glacial recently.
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SilverRattler Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Did you hit a period of writer's block or why have you been unable to keep up on updates?

Is it a popular story? I know it was for at least a little while since you have typed up so many words on this. I see this one I'm on was posted July 2011. I didn't even hear about MLP FiM until November 2011. xD
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012
It's not a writer's block as much as it is that I have poor time management skills, and schoolwork gets in the way a lot. Update speed was fine during the last summer, but it tanked when school started up again.

To the best of my knowledge, World Without Rainbows isn't very well known, but it does have its share of enthusiastic fans, which I'm grateful for.
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KurseofKings Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2012
Sorry about the accidental uneeded itailcs. That was only supposed to be used on the word "hard."
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KurseofKings Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2012
"I'd trust ya about as far as I can buck ya." Considering just how hard,/i> she can buck, I, in my opinion at least, call this a poor choice of words.
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2012
I've never really understood that expression, anyway. Is it possible to trust a person up to, say, ten feet?

And if you do, does that mean you get weary of them when they're within 10 feet of you, or do you want them at most 10 feet from you at all times?
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KurseofKings Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2012
I have no idea. I'm just saying what I thought.
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2012
And your point is very valid.

Especially for a lightweight like Twilight.
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spamholderman Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2012
" There's an old Earth saying, Captain. A phrase of great power and wisdom and consolation to the soul in times of need. " Allons-y!
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2012
"State your name, rank, and intention."

"The Doctor... doctor... fun."
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Sonic-chaos Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I only have one thing to say:
Allons-y!
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shioku21 Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011
AMAZING!
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Chill-penguin Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2011
i like where this is going.
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ClockwiseGear Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Doctor Whooves? Seriously? You're going to play the Doctor Card?

This is pertinent to my interests.
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Obscureish Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011
DOCTOR WHOOOOOVES!
Sorry. Entertaining story so far, I'd love to see more!
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KitXune Featured By Owner May 29, 2011
Just thought I'd leave you a comment to let you know I'm eagerly awaiting the next installment.

Keep it up, bro!
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner May 29, 2011
So am I, bro. So am I.

It's already finished. Expect it up very soon.
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SynestheticSoul Featured By Owner May 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this story so far! I can't wait for the next chapter!
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SynestheticSoul Featured By Owner May 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Anticipation! This story is so good! I can't wait for the end!
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner May 29, 2011
Well, just to give you a fair warning, the end is a good ways off.

We're just getting started.
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SynestheticSoul Featured By Owner May 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh snap! I'm excited. :D I haven't read a good fanfic on anything in a long, long time!
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner May 29, 2011
Thank you so much. Also, to give you the heads up, chapter 9 is already complete. It's going through my prereaders right now.
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SynestheticSoul Featured By Owner May 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome~! :D
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Green-Kirby Featured By Owner May 26, 2011
I think it was sorta out of the blue to insert Dr. whooves into the story to be honest. I think it would have been fine without him and it sorta ruins the mood a bit.

Otherwise, this story have been lovely!
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner May 26, 2011
You're not the only person who thinks that.

Well, I live and learn.
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RangerGxi Featured By Owner May 26, 2011
Dr whooves?
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner May 26, 2011
A pony that strongly resembles the titular character of "Doctor Who".
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RangerGxi Featured By Owner May 26, 2011
I just never saw that coming.
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Ziblink Featured By Owner May 26, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
*Looks into future*

Nope, not nearly that many, only about a quarter that.

Also, dimensions without actual physical transfer? I am amaze.
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Asalis Featured By Owner May 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're dragging Doctor Who into this? My all time favorite sci-fi show and your draggin the pony representation of that into this?
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner May 26, 2011
Yes, but as I've been forced to tell someone on ED, not permanently. It's a shoutout, not a complete crossover.
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The-Letter-J Featured By Owner May 25, 2011
Oh wow. So is this going to become a crossover fic now?

Anyway, time for my comments.

Rainbow Dash, Gilda, WD-40, and the principle's office? That sounds like quite the noodle incident.

Is Sky Mirror Lake a name from somewhere in the canon, or did you take it from "Better Living Through Science and Ponies?"

So moonside Applejack changed her name when she joined the Orange family. I really hope it's something more creative than Orangejack. That just sounds silly. So I assume that at some point Twilight will tell them what she knows about their moonside counterparts, especially Applejack. Part of me is surprised that they haven't asked, but I suppose they're more concerned with saving Twilight, and Twilight would probably be the one who would think to ask about that type of thing first anyway.

"What's so special about a rock?" asked Rarity.
You of all ponies shouldn't be questioning it, Rarity. Your destiny was a rock ;p

Are we going to find out the identity of the ponies who died? But since everyone is still alive sunside, they couldn't have been anypony important, right?

So let me see if I've got this "science" right.
Mixing light and magic can open up a portal of sorts that can be seen on both sides. It can be used to see anywhere on the other side, regardless of the physical locations. Sound should not be able to travel through this portal, so I assume they communicated with Zecora using written messages, lip reading, sign language, or something like that. This all does not take much energy because light is nor particularly massive. Also, moonside Twilight was lucky no one sunside saw her spying on Twilight.
Physical objects can also be sent through similar portals, but doing so requires a considerable amount of energy, and the energy cost grows as the mass of the object increases. Because Twilight could transport a letter and thinks she could transport a filly (but not a full-grown pony), the energy cost probably grows linearly. Though for some reason my instinct is for it to be an exponential growth. I might have to do a bit a of research, but I think there's some precedence for that in physics. Transporting matter is also not restricted by physical location, or it at least has a range large enough for moonside Twilight to send sunside Twilight a letter from the Everfree forest. When matter is sent across, the Law of Conservation of Mass seems to apply only when both universes are considered together. That is to say, Twilight sent the letter to the sunside, but as far as I can tell, no mass appeared moonside to replace it and no mass disappeared sunside to be replaced. But when a living organism is transported, while mass may not be conserved, it seems that both organisms must make the jump (I say that mass is not conserved because even though each side gains and loses one pony, there is no way that the two ponies would have exactly the same mass, even if they are counterparts. Just look at the two Fluttershys). I'm having a hard time coming up with any reason for this beyond the Law of Conservation of Mass though.
Finally, memories can be transmitted easily as they have no mass, but the ponies involved must be near each other. Really, the only way any of this can make sense is by saying it's magic. Which it is.
tl;dr: I spend too much time thinking about fictional sicence-magic.

But what is odd is that the memories between the Twilights don't seem to have actually switched. It seems that a copy of each Twilight's memories was made, and those copies were placed in the other pony where they overshadowed the original memories of that Twilight. Not overrode, just overshadowed, which is why sunside Twilight still has some of moonside Twilight's memories. But what I think this could mean is that if they are unable to switch the Twilights back, it could be possible to find a way to just bring the original memories of each Twilight back to the front.

I'm not even entirely sure why moonside Twilight thought it was necessary to go sunside. If she wanted to find out how the sunside ponies defeated Nightmare Moon, why couldn't she have just talked with sunside Twilight like she did with sunside Zecora? I would think that she would see another Twilight as a powerful ally. With their combined intellect and magic they might have even been able to bring moonside Twilight sunside if necessary.

And finally, if moonside Twilight built a greenhouse that's been helping starving ponies, why do they not like her over there?
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner May 25, 2011
I think I'm in love with you, sir.

Sky Mirror Lake was a shout-out to Better Living, but it's also not the first time I've referenced the fanon. I mentioned the Swayback Mountains in chapter 1. And it won't be the last, either, considering the working title of chapter 9.

I'm not sure what lead you to believe that both organisms need to cross together. The implication was supposed to be that the very unfortunate guinea pony only went through halfway.

Your mention that it wasn't necessary for Twilight to cross over is completely correct. But moonside Twilight is a coward. Her intentions are probably a bit more selfish than she wants the others to believe.

And there's a reason why Ponyville doesn't like her.
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The-Letter-J Featured By Owner May 25, 2011
Ah, okay. I knew there was no way you both could have randomly given a lake the same name. And now I kinda want to see pony!Chell show up on both sides. I wonder if the mane cast's failing befriend each other would also have prevented Chell from defeating GLaDOS. First Nightmare Moon takes over, then GLaDOS...no wonder moonside Twilight wants to get out :)
And you said Chapter 9 is about moonside Pinkie. Is that working title a reference to "Cupcakes?"

Okay, I see that now. Rather obvious, really. I think I was led to believe that the ponies on each side would have to switch places because the Twilights switched. I suppose that was a bit foalish of me. Ah well, moving on.
Though that makes me believe even more that moonside Twilight should have tried contacting sunside Twilight so they could work together to bring her across.
And looking back a bit I realized that moonside Twilight was really only trying to defeat Nightmare Moon before it happened. Now she's just trying to get out. So yeah, selfish coward sounds fairly accurate.

And now I'm wondering who that test pony was. I can't help but think that it was moonside Applejack. She was pretty much moonside Twilight's only friend, right? And if she's anything like sunside Applejack, she'd be willing to do anything for her friends. And then there's her reaction to Applejack confronting her a few chapters back. Twilight's behavior made sense when you consider that (the sunside version of) her only friend was turning on her, but even more so if she was the sunside version of her only friend, who not only had died for her, but was also killed by her. Ouch. And in this chapter she explicitly says that she never met any of sunside Twilight's friends, but we know she met Rarity and Applejack. The time she met Rarity was brief and forgettable, so that's excusable, but she obviously is trying to hide the fact that she knew moonside Applejack. Finally, there's the fact that we haven't seen moonside Applejack, except for in memories, and Pumpkin didn't recognize her name (and since she knows Apple Bloom, it's hard to believe she wouldn't know Applejack, even if she did change her name). Though moonside Rarity didn't mention the Oranges in her list of relatives who where living on the farm, so it's possible she's back in Manehattan. And you said we've learned the fates of the mane cast (other than Rainbow Dash), but like I said, we've only seen moonside Applejack in flashbacks, so we don't really know her fate yet.

The only other candidates I can think of are moonside Zecora (not likely, I think), a random pony Twilight convinced to be a test subject (not likely if they all hate her), or a random pony Twilight kidnapped. I really hope it's not the last one. My sympathy for her will drop tremendously if it is.
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner May 26, 2011
Your theories are very interesting, and make a lot of sense.

Well, they should, since one of them was spot-on.
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The-Letter-J Featured By Owner May 26, 2011
VICTORY! :dance:
Narrator: "For an encore he went on to prove that black is white and got himself killed on the next zebra crossing."


And looking at other comments, I see that people aren't liking Doctor Whooves showing up. Personally (ponyally?), I don't have any problem with it as long as he doesn't go in his Tardis and fix everything. If you just write him as a scientist who might have a few theories about this type of thing or some equipment that could be useful, I don't think it's really a problem.
One possibility that I think everyone would be happy with is that he just has a lab that they can use so Moonside Twilight can reproduce the lab she had.
Another possibility would be him having blue box of some sort that he's trying to use to do some dimension hopping, but that he can't get work until moonside Twilight shares her knowledge with him. Though that might be cutting it a bit close.
But I'm sure whatever you do will be fine.
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner May 26, 2011
I was actually thinking about Hitchhiker's Guide right before I read this. (The Someone Else's Problem Field, specifically.) Uncanny.

And you hit the nail on the head again. The Doctor will not fix everything. He is not a mad man in a blue box. He will not journey with the crew moonside.
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The-Letter-J Featured By Owner May 26, 2011
Great minds think alike...and sometimes the rest of us get lucky. ;P

Forget a crossover with Doctor Whooves, you should make this into a H2G2 crossover. :) I wonder if that's been done yet...
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner May 26, 2011
That would be interesting. I'd read it.

Unfortunately, I refuse to let that happen with WWR. I've already plotted almost all of the story, anyway.
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slaughterdew Featured By Owner May 25, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Dr Whooves! :D
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner May 25, 2011
Trust him, he's the Doctor.
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itena Featured By Owner May 25, 2011
NEW CHAPTER. I AM NOW FROTHING AT THE MOUTH.AASFDDSFFKLDMFMGHJFSEFIFL
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner May 25, 2011
Why are you frothing?
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itena Featured By Owner May 25, 2011
Excitement?
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FreedomAndChaos Featured By Owner May 25, 2011
Oh. It sounded like you were angry for some reason.
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itena Featured By Owner May 25, 2011
Me, angry? Heavens to betsy nooo! I rarely ever get angry with anything on the internet. The chapter was good, and finally answered a lot of questions.
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The-Letter-J Featured By Owner May 25, 2011
Woohoo new chapter!

But my lunch break just isn't long enough. I'll have to wait until I get off work to read and critique this :/
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